tortillasoup

Scene 1920: Verona, Italy. Romeo has killed Tybalt after Tybalt killed Mercutio and now the Capulets have just found Tybalt's body.

Enter Lady Capulet, Capulet, and Juliet. Juliet is stunned.

Lady Capulet: For soft, what has happened in this ruthful square? My own cousin Tybalt has been killed.

Capulet: We must find who killed him! Let us go now and call the police.

Capulet: Help! Help! My dear cousin hath been killed.

Police: We shall come with the prince right away.

Enter Police and the Prince

Prince: What has happened here? Have the Montagues fought with you once again?

Enter a Capulet Kinsman:

Capulet kinsman: I have seen what has happened. Young Romeo has slain Tybalt. I was watching the fight from a window. Tybalt fought bravely and killed Mercutio, but in the end, Romeo was too much for him.

Prince: Let us go kill him! Get the horse.

//The prince gets into his car and then find Romeo nearby with a horse; perhaps the fastest steed in Italy. They catch up to him.//

//Enter The Capulets, the Prince, and the Police//

Police : Stop! I command thee in thee in the fair name of Verona.

Prince : If you refuse, I have no choice but to exile you. Stop this madness before I fire upon you.

Romeo : Juliet! Juliet! If you love me, then leave your family later and come with me.

Prince: Fire!

//The police fire single-shot guns upon Romeo. Romeo speeds up and quickly gets out of firing distance. He continues to ride off to Mantua.// //.//

//Later, that same day.//

//Enter Juliet and Nurse.//

Juliet : I must be with Romeo. Nurse, get me my horse.

Nurse: For where shall you be going?

Juliet: I shall be going to Mantua; the city of my dreams as Romeo lies awake for me there.

Nurse: Wherefore shall you choose Romeo o'er Paris? Although you are married to Romeo, Paris excels Romeo, as an elephant surpasses a fly.

Juliet: You compel me to think. I decide that what you say is correct. I will marry Paris. Nurse, tell my mother to get ready for the wedding tomorrow.

Nurse exits.

Juliet: O wherefore shall I find a noble heart, to which I can trust to not be blighted from. There is only one that I can truly trust, and that one is Romeo. For I shall now go with him, and be with him in Mantua. Farewell my family, for I know not when I shall see you again. Adieu!

//Juliet walks outside, gets her horse and rides off towards Mantua.//

Enchiladaaa I think your going on the right path right now. I think that you should have more fussing while Romeo is trying to get away. Also a car and a motorcycle? I think you might find some other sort of transportation.

kungpao I think you should add a stronger reaction from Juliet and instead of later that day maybe have both Nurse and Juliet enter with the rest of the Capulet's. Once Juliet says "I must be with Romeo" you should add reactions from the other Capulets.

Senorita Burrito: I think the car and motorcycle need to be changed with something and I don't think Nurse would just let Juliet ride away to Mantua like that i think have a little dialogue between them.

Senortaco: the scene that you have created is very interesting and is a refreshing turn of events. I believe, however, that if you are in fact writing this as if it is in the 1920s, that you may want to adjust the dialogue because it seems even more old-fashioned than ones I've seen dated in the renaissance.